TUCK SHOP TUCK SHOP! I chant My test on persuasive writing

Persuasive Writing Assessment Room 5 Tautoro School

Date: September 2  2016

Name:  Iverson (Word Count - 306 )

Planning 5 minutes

Writing 40 minutes

Proof-reading 5 minutes

Ideas	Struc/Lang	Org	Vocab	Sentence	Spelling	Punc	Level
4	5	6	5	5	5	5	4A

Planning space It is about having a Tuck shop in Tautoro School.

TTS Tautoro Tuck Shop

I think we should have a Tuck shop here in Tautoro School. Why?

Because It will help you from getting in trouble. Plus It will help the school if they need to fundraise for anything. Added on to this it is Fun.

My first main reason is because it will save you from getting in trouble.

Like what if you left your  stationery at home or what if it was crunched or soaked from the rain and you didn’t know what to tell your teacher. That would be dreadful. But What if there was a way you didn’t have to tell the teacher Wait I know how just buy one from the tuck shop. Now thats what im talking about. TUCK SHOP! TUCK SHOP!

My second main reason is that The tuck shop can help Tautoro school to fundraise for anything. How? For example If we wanted to have a hydro slide for our school pool And We don't have enough money we can use the tuck shop money to fundraise Because The tuck shop is on Tautoro ground isn’t it. Isn’t this wicked I think it is.

My third main reason is that it is fun to have a tuck shop here in Tautoro.

If we do get a Tuck shop one thing I know is that it is going to be fun.

Who doesn’t like fun. When we are playing bullrush maybe we could stop by next to the tuck shop and buy something to drink or to eat. Even the teachers might walk past and see something they like. Isn’t That just magnificent.

In summary I think we should have a Tuck Shop here at Tautoro school.

Don't you think! It will help fundraise, it will save you from getting in trouble and it is fun.

Lets have Fun!

SPLATTER SPLATTER WE NEED TO BE SAFE! WHO'S WITH ME

    WE NEED TO BE SAFE!                         

We must  be a safe community. Don’t you think?

We must change the speed limit around Tautoro. Added on to this,  I think we should also get pathways and pedestrian crossings. Why? For the safety of kids when they cross the road. Who’s with me?

My first main reason is to get footpaths on the side of the road for the  kids.

After school has finished kids walk home. Since there are no footpaths for them to walk on, they walk on the road.  What if a big truck came past and the truck hit that person and did not know. WOW! SLOW THE TRUCK DOWN! That is outrageous. We need footpaths to keep fellow students safe A.S.A.P.

My second main reason is to have pedestrian crossings .

So when they cross the road they will be safe and happy. Would you want to cross a road with a pedestrian crossing or a dreadful road with no pedestrian crossing with a chance of you getting hurt or even losing your life. We should stay safe and have pedestrian crossings around our community in Tautoro. Now that’s what I’m talking about.

My Third main reason is to change the speed limit.

Every time out of Kaikohe or even in Tautoro the speed limit is now horrible. People are going over 100 kilometres per hour. I think we should change the speed limit to 70 or under, to keep people and kids safe.  For example, what if someone was speeding and a student or adult popped out of nowhere, Bang! It would be a tragic accident.

In summary, we must make Tautoro a safe community so that there will be NO accidents.

                                                                          LET'S BE SAFE NOW!

Chinese Cuisine

Catching Dreams

Today Matua Ray Bishop visited our school. He is an amazing duffy hero to me and everybody else

Today I learnt that if you want to achieve your dreams you have to work hard and strive for your dreams.

My  role model is my dad

My dream was always to be a famous basketballer like Michael  Jordan who makes mega money and who is also my rolemodel