Persuasive Writing Assessment Room 5 Tautoro School
Date: September 2 2016
Name: Iverson (Word Count - 306 )
Planning 5 minutes
Writing 40 minutes
Proof-reading 5 minutes
Ideas
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4A
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Planning space
It is about having a Tuck shop in Tautoro School.
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TTS Tautoro Tuck Shop
I think we should have a Tuck shop here in Tautoro School. Why?
Because It will help you from getting in trouble. Plus It will help the school if they need to fundraise for anything. Added on to this it is Fun.
My first main reason is because it will save you from getting in trouble.
Like what if you left your stationery at home or what if it was crunched or soaked from the rain and you didn’t know what to tell your teacher. That would be dreadful. But What if there was a way you didn’t have to tell the teacher Wait I know how just buy one from the tuck shop. Now thats what im talking about. TUCK SHOP! TUCK SHOP!
My second main reason is that The tuck shop can help Tautoro school to fundraise for anything. How? For example If we wanted to have a hydro slide for our school pool And We don't have enough money we can use the tuck shop money to fundraise Because The tuck shop is on Tautoro ground isn’t it. Isn’t this wicked I think it is.
My third main reason is that it is fun to have a tuck shop here in Tautoro.
If we do get a Tuck shop one thing I know is that it is going to be fun.
Who doesn’t like fun. When we are playing bullrush maybe we could stop by next to the tuck shop and buy something to drink or to eat. Even the teachers might walk past and see something they like. Isn’t That just magnificent.
In summary I think we should have a Tuck Shop here at Tautoro school.
Don't you think! It will help fundraise, it will save you from getting in trouble and it is fun.
Lets have Fun!
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